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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。( E& }7 a, q+ L* T8 E$ Q+ T
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 * \7 b. ?+ U# V7 n7 {2 {舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ ! l0 e2 D, I4 C$ f! P7 b$ WThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. ( r/ N! u% d7 l- A$ q! i联系电话 02106259990 s& e( C$ D/ k; K0 {4 j: Q
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。8 h4 l u2 p! c1 V! c3 O0 `
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。' o$ J6 { x4 G* `- B# R7 D. Q) u
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。2 s7 o. M7 B0 L. [/ Q, X
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。/ |8 d9 f+ ?! L6 F- L4 f
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 : J* o7 K% v$ r6 R房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。: y! J$ G# y. f0 N
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性： 2 Q% b8 [4 W. s8 n 5 e; Z* n2 t8 n) c9 B W
原始错误分析 6 {/ h+ \+ u8 T: S; N% n; Q0 i4 ? * a7 f8 }2 S2 C$ i8 Z5 b* W1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。5 Y; z: }7 Z$ V1 J# D
( T' q# W' l# E3 Z5 ]; |) X o4 r2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。 % H" @, F( l9 z4 O5 ]5 j8 Z8 y 8 H3 O/ O9 w0 S; R3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。4 U9 E8 c; p; M' Q+ d
) g4 w% ~9 C+ V5 g4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。 0 T+ U/ C3 d, t/ J/ E 1 J( ~; p |$ W% {2 ^8 m+ m
修改后的版本8 P7 q4 Y4 N! H' A; `
5 z Y0 C- G% [, |7 H8 y; ?8 UGood afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you?7 ?+ b4 w1 @6 k8 `7 p' F. f
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1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。 8 f# X' n1 U8 D! d 2 X5 ~' l z7 f
2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 " f/ R) E r+ M7 m1 }5 e房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 5 u: C: ~3 v/ C5 bThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。+ _3 n. x* ^' X7 C/ F) A
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 . a2 R+ S9 e. Z y7 Y3 GThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ; C7 X' h' G% }6 x5 s9 _7 a5 a房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。" @+ D# a3 f) g
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。+ U- C0 ]" I- ]( y3 q
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 8 e8 ?5 L Y- A$ vThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ $ D3 w; q( O/ T7 \& n! ] m F绝对舒适，绝对优惠！, c$ O% x: h$ Y" ^( I
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。" j8 M1 ?3 g$ S/ ]' d
房屋舒适，环境好。0 y) z* z( V" m* ?
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ 8 F1 Y B: X' I0 {1 ~8 O* q6 s绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ 6 I! J$ o& z2 S2 H+ x. B) FWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。: H) t. R+ i; J% o4 V! }
房屋舒适，环境好。 $ t% f* J5 i) v: OThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ 9 G9 |& P. t! j' [! a5 c( v$ K绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ 5 k0 W$ d( ~6 z4 oWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。1 _- W3 e3 R, p1 U4 h, [; m2 l+ U% V
房屋舒适，环境好。 * t, n0 t5 n& q) vThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 0 F% D& q, z/ }6 d+ K9 e5 l' x& ~朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ; z! L2 D2 o2 }' @$ D, \& ?! M/ m舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 0 @# u8 N* p: E: x8 L' b5 {: @This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 0 v8 n8 ]( Y5 _# [1 ]9 Z5 `9 ]6 i联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。( l9 D6 `9 p$ ~% R: \. O" i5 a
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。4 l- F4 T- P8 D5 O) W
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ . p# J" Z ?% O( Q* n6 N6 D9 zThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.) F& V! X7 @. |4 L2 Q
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