本帖最后由 爱美丽的小肥猫 于 2025-5-17 11:36 编辑 4 U$ l2 c' h; `$ z# b y% i9 R / [/ f: A/ f4 e" u' _, x3 NWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。# _- M7 U# ?. B) z
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 0 g) G7 T) }7 z! C) n F舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！; P+ D; B' L3 _. a1 w+ f
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 3 W; Y) r3 Y/ n/ X联系电话 0210625999! T: r3 C3 _% E2 S" \
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。2 b5 K; l. P7 e1 t: l) p* y) \* g
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。- `1 S W' z) \
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。' @" O8 _5 j! N+ Z( ~, C+ K" l
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 ; {# ^* ]4 `. { `( p& Q7 RThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。5 A/ o7 w1 L0 W% ?2 l J8 N
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 4 B$ X* T) Q% O$ R! fThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性： 9 }( y. v! N* ~& v+ t- V) j - V+ j+ C& W# U Q2 g
原始错误分析 3 x( E! f+ S2 z/ R+ r7 n' L % [. s$ j$ ^. T" C# j F
1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。4 f9 M2 U w' n+ O# d$ H8 ]
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2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。4 N2 t3 b, ~" l8 p7 Z" {% v$ Q
( P& \% f7 I! Z3 y4 |* [ j+ s3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。! H9 ]1 {' d# G' [$ D( z
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4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。0 C" k! Q/ B2 { V
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修改后的版本6 ^+ u) q& f$ \$ F6 H7 A O5 y
. K5 s* g& J" p1 I& X9 n( vGood afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you?/ w4 @8 o4 h0 U e8 `6 r* X' R# _- @* T: x
4 I2 b. j0 m4 K版本说明 $ r3 ?- Q0 B1 s, T1 ` " s' {5 I4 u6 q: E I n; Y1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。8 \6 C* H! ^" }/ ^: K% B# h
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2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
3 O6 T) W+ e9 H6 G1 b! r, KWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。4 w" ^$ F- b% i. ?
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 & b9 A i! n. y7 n9 d! O$ \9 AThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ! x- K# [) G$ \8 G- X房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 1 I( V% ~7 R+ | l- |This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 8 b u6 _5 j6 z! Y- i房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 A" c Q- p0 h& L
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 9 ]+ G* _' T- n房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 , v# P. b) ?5 {3 y# x$ UThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！3 r# L9 y/ W$ _5 Y
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！* B1 S6 i% e) O
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。3 F K* O5 U- v- A5 q7 o. h
房屋舒适，环境好。 3 ^" n5 i- D5 k, P% Z1 ?' J/ BThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ ) C5 {# B3 y* t3 A绝对舒适，绝对优惠！1 I! Q9 A, ?1 _5 u, m+ E
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。) x& O1 q) f+ k0 I1 O: m9 a ^% e
房屋舒适，环境好。 ! s) e6 h; F7 S4 F. d" qThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ ( c$ T& D* x. C9 z: Z) }7 u绝对舒适，绝对优惠！! `4 |' ^0 k |: l( c# q% J( K
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 " f# K1 h7 w# q: M( [房屋舒适，环境好。 # Z' Z- L9 u; E" q5 o" pThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。' e5 @8 Z: B& l7 t* C) A3 ^+ R
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。8 S5 G) y. N8 q4 k8 [
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 8 Y K) |: I; s/ ]This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids." R2 M- b2 X- i$ H* {
联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。2 }: l7 y& \! P4 ^
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。% a+ F1 N( P9 J: N. K* b l
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ ' x8 c/ @+ O0 R8 P# j7 c. dThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. " u5 W' [! \/ m$ E" J5 n联系电话 0210625999
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