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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。% e I/ i+ `, D1 }
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 }6 y' x" M( |
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 2 C9 p- c, j" EThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.' Q* P9 w# J' Z
联系电话 0210625999 4 p' J, b' V) ^& ?# E/ Z ?% H5 e+ ?9 Z8 {3 g# C& R6 B! T
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 : ]% E+ s5 O$ H! `5 Q房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。 # V4 F6 E5 _! C) `3 }4 sThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。6 L+ N3 n2 X7 ?3 p
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。/ M4 ^. W1 v4 z4 C; K
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 5 M" r6 D7 _) i4 U7 H房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 9 m% V9 f( e+ U5 p( [This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性：4 o$ _& X+ |) R
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原始错误分析 3 }+ {; f& g# Q: Q$ y% Y " h. [2 s$ { |1 A7 }- e& h) A$ b
1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。 ( g- z0 a4 J: Z/ x& c ; E" Y8 H' M8 R5 V' M
2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。8 x/ o' @$ J; y7 T) F
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3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。 - t! k( {) a4 B* o n( v) ]- d, z( L' C6 ]
4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。 1 Z2 O5 v. Y( j+ ]) k9 X! w & ?! T9 a9 c, f6 t4 A修改后的版本/ T1 ~3 q5 m6 \
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Good afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you? % }4 O2 i4 u( Y 2 M; H Q! Q( M2 u6 l$ q
版本说明 + |/ R0 r' h+ z, a- w3 p4 ~3 _ 5 r6 Z% y0 f/ o' g4 N1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。3 l2 u6 ]5 ^: Q7 u! | B
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2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 1 a8 R: ]+ \1 h+ b z: x, [% }房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。, u0 X$ P. S& F8 w' J F
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 M7 y' q+ G. z! Z6 O5 S6 t# i
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。( E; F- `2 X8 f7 U+ p, ?
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 6 h2 P, J& N% O! w- a! A' C. p房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 8 `0 @" o1 |+ K0 T, mThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 7 e7 ?5 q0 w6 F+ ~9 {, M3 Y: X房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 # A) x0 U" g. {4 @; R/ S( \This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ . a) s: Y8 x# ] B' e( w" m绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ / O; M; T/ |/ f* r& {Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。; p1 I1 r5 [4 s- s
房屋舒适，环境好。6 R2 x; K2 N) a5 j: U
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ % s# k. D3 h4 v5 n3 S绝对舒适，绝对优惠！+ j0 }3 F* {3 }& O
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。- k* x2 _& N$ q
房屋舒适，环境好。 : c3 K- D: }# |# [! P/ ^" RThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ & I g% `3 a5 V* C$ _& }) `绝对舒适，绝对优惠！! ]* D0 X# C# M- v R& e r
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。( B Z! ^2 v6 z, r/ ?. G
房屋舒适，环境好。 2 q5 G6 e9 G# Z* ~& T8 k" oThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 * W3 y4 U/ s, I朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。/ {4 g3 j5 @8 o$ A x9 H
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！6 R* S+ F" N6 g' r3 p B2 h
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 2 X; Y ~! ?6 w( \9 {, k9 p联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 $ ~ |* R9 _- k0 Y. P朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 , T* f X4 ^* X' c舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ . c1 [9 h; @) ~+ p2 a8 l+ cThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. $ G' l# m/ N* O1 z* r联系电话 0210625999
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