本帖最后由 爱美丽的小肥猫 于 2025-5-17 11:36 编辑 ; ]$ s$ h4 }/ o- W5 S 8 i' z/ N9 T F$ x% }Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。# o0 @5 M! }$ }% g7 N9 d, O* X
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ( i2 f8 ?0 V8 |( F舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 9 ]7 W. I% l6 \8 KThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. ' W; I) }4 i4 |联系电话 02106259992 Q' I3 T$ D* N" A2 s, U
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 8 x" E w- y8 z% y& E. ]房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。 7 {+ c Y- e- H" Z% _& N: W9 mThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 + i, X) j8 ?) Q! {7 m房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。' v. L: A( v+ r6 @6 n
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。/ F% e# Z: [4 Y' ?& r
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。( S- `* M+ Q2 k& r
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性： : t. X- ~2 i9 m3 S 5 U+ T/ m3 _0 u5 f原始错误分析 : U, S- ]! @6 K3 W + T8 `& H8 }& N% x$ @: I4 Q
1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。' {' u! U+ {6 x1 F3 P) K$ W9 a! z
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2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。 S# F! l( B" M( ^' r* A6 h
; h3 V* s1 u( N# _ W3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。 $ x2 s% o3 v0 x. T9 b* D: }2 s0 B 3 R: t) g, k4 V- I3 t0 K/ _4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。: [/ s/ c) g/ {( m0 o* s
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修改后的版本 " \* G7 i& d" u- u g4 ]! G F 0 o0 S& ?. V7 O( f% ~0 J0 N; q
Good afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you?: b% k+ b. _+ F
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版本说明 ' i, ]* b' x9 R : |3 B/ C0 n) j3 x& K' O3 m
1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。 * t T) F2 ~# r$ f4 H . m$ [( b& f: I5 l# V! `2 z2 q
2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 1 [# R5 u1 F; _房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。: Z4 Z0 b7 Y" T, a# L/ g" w# @
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ) X0 H: g" x( M房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。5 I, s2 b6 @6 i* R) X% U9 N
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。$ H+ \% v# _( S) k' P2 e: e; ^
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。* b2 H% {9 U" X; g2 q
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。7 v: Y, G- y+ q; L2 _5 q
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 6 h* q( V# p/ d# F' X2 R& j7 OThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！/ q; u* d) C4 u% @% F2 R
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ $ N, R5 W) Z5 b6 P$ y6 CWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 , k& C0 B+ @6 g1 K9 z房屋舒适，环境好。 Z ~# m r) U) R6 H# K4 `This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ 5 f" A9 d/ e0 U绝对舒适，绝对优惠！- m% n% Y `; ]4 x- N Y7 z
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。6 t( B, \4 x' Q/ [, Z# _, ~
房屋舒适，环境好。 ) p: k2 w; g' N; ]0 R3 nThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ 3 k3 v4 D( J! D4 H# S. a! g1 r绝对舒适，绝对优惠！1 M @* ^1 E w5 a8 h& t
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。% T4 L# q' p" Q& g$ W3 S
房屋舒适，环境好。 : T: S* j3 I- q1 |* pThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。2 Q; {. x+ l d( J% w
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。( X' M6 f: D9 t: L: L
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！$ D5 `8 {# L! I
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. / ]# q4 d& s/ w联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。9 G' u( w3 ]- q; Z
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 # x/ J, [9 R$ ~( ]% X" a3 V舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 5 Z. x3 o r6 h' yThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids./ w; [0 I/ H# i9 m7 h) H! A
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