% I, { j9 `& W6 jWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。1 t" f9 A i* G' d- T$ y1 K
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 % P2 B4 e: I6 V舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 9 k; Z* F, g+ Y( L/ R; aThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.1 E, |- C* ^, |9 E. ]
联系电话 0210625999 , \! i$ f; N7 K; _6 L' D" ^3 T$ l5 d: t& B! s ~! \! |
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。& e3 j2 Q6 q* f5 t# ^* H' { M( a: L! F
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。 2 |7 x$ S8 O7 I: T2 \! M! R/ ^This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 7 x2 L( {; k8 A房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。2 n( s0 h3 r- M: m) Y' ~
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 # }' _3 K+ R( C1 Q房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 $ d& x# x! N; A8 K/ q2 MThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性： ' Z n0 V! W+ a* J, _! b; J 2 r; |9 j3 K8 c$ B J1 P2 q原始错误分析2 a. Y1 s0 s! f, d: z9 b
$ o: J( e7 H" x# ]1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。 4 f: P1 V4 d, u q C5 [( E 2 W$ E, A1 B6 R d- |% A1 t
2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。 # E) n9 v; v6 {9 x! w ) B, [6 E( f) ~& G6 d9 M8 f/ n/ b D
3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。 0 H0 |' C/ W, ^! b$ e* U: K+ ]9 V % p- B3 _. V7 q- B$ L" R
4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。 # H3 }1 w4 _5 T 0 ^3 ^1 f, h% d! }修改后的版本 ! Z8 Q, ^, ~- S) u& d; ?" f8 h7 \2 H + l4 t! E! T) R+ vGood afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you?7 }: r( o: m2 `: d8 `- _9 }" Z
& v# U8 P2 y% o. G版本说明4 B- k6 s% P- N4 X% A
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1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。 - j$ X( m4 w' p( [+ i6 J9 d9 | : w; l3 l7 _4 a" ?3 F5 [
2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。8 ~7 ~' P1 w, H+ |1 u& N1 ?
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。. |8 ]) A/ I. \+ @! d3 Q$ K" Q! {
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。1 V: V! B% l; [- n
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。- W% h* f( L) x0 ?# o% k
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 / n+ Q$ N1 n4 _4 F2 I0 j房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。8 N0 v9 S N$ {: n2 T6 c3 n, A' _
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ' R; h8 N1 L$ L房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 / B) s, A; M, S, W- F( \5 [( J% XThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ ! x- h3 R- M2 M/ {7 n' h绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ # k1 D! C. T4 N+ s7 r8 PWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 6 t; N3 L M7 V/ G; |房屋舒适，环境好。& F1 ~5 R/ A8 ?9 B
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！, Y- D+ L. D0 L1 S& x0 l9 m2 S4 K
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！% S, V0 ~& V' j* e
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。$ a6 \% b) P" ?
房屋舒适，环境好。 9 Y5 b4 d" \7 p* [1 w+ C/ y$ SThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ 8 c" V/ p. C/ U# m# ~- `* W2 S绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ $ v+ ]+ R# g: I8 c$ Z* F0 AWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。" w' k/ h! F) `7 I9 a2 H+ ?
房屋舒适，环境好。" H: `3 N) S" L9 i5 S$ O$ d0 V2 o
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 g- u% R* N* \; v
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。2 d; A6 _1 r, Q4 O% P6 A7 Z% @7 T8 }
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！* V. y8 A8 ?$ |/ X
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.8 h* k5 w3 e; h0 t
联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 0 S; P. q" Y* d( H朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。$ l% q9 u! E/ s, w1 I$ r
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ * \/ X+ q- c6 QThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 9 w6 i3 P+ E w1 s$ q联系电话 0210625999
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