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+ G/ t, f7 R, u9 k) mWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。7 |4 a5 S' ~" u v6 n
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 2 u/ K; k9 K; S- t4 f" Y舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 8 W3 q9 o$ h C: V `! rThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. ! o& t3 @+ f/ c c& X联系电话 02106259990 I9 F$ o8 D8 Y0 [, a! M
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 . U9 U- M+ F) |% D" c" o- x房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。6 i$ |; Q* q1 I& U- G
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 4 T( A$ |: @% P房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。) }8 m* p0 q+ b. k
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。* \, H7 c, ?+ E" D5 r) Z
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。( ]( g. x3 H* W/ U( B
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性：- }3 Q' m8 |/ v" y
# U, k" H) F! s ?. `6 M, T& E0 Q原始错误分析 : J" f$ N2 i/ I( ]7 M9 k0 ] 9 V9 r5 Z) | F; }" U
1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。 ) F( x. s( }1 Y6 M9 J. h ) z, X& I9 g$ ?
2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。& Q/ D! G* u, {% K, K
% j5 d( @! V( n+ @3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。 % W- W2 c/ T q4 d: C : A1 U1 _- Y0 G! l; v' \* D4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。 ' v; I' J: x1 h $ Z' |; }* E! Q& w0 _% b2 {1 c2 V3 g
修改后的版本 6 V$ J1 b# b0 b7 P- H' T + X3 @& P4 r9 ^Good afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you? / Z6 `! V9 Q# P7 v, W9 g& e 4 {1 E) [0 j6 n
版本说明 3 N( E3 \+ H* Q0 h( x 6 ] m# Q- q' r$ A* r
1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。 p4 X2 p+ I& X& g& P' G; ^4 d
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2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 R. ] o3 g' i8 t/ T. ], ]$ Y3 B房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ; S- X/ P! ]. cThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 - P# ^6 L, s- r房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 " w" o9 @. k' @' T0 _& K7 }This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。5 p& Q% Y, H+ C6 s7 m1 h
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。) P- l) ~ g; U$ ]
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。+ X1 f( ]3 k* C1 X7 o2 u
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。' [1 |) G% u& a: l$ h6 t7 q
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ 4 c8 R7 [" K& {绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ & J/ S0 ?( A2 m; DWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。% ?8 t3 N7 F3 ]" I& N' j
房屋舒适，环境好。 ) Q* r: \% K7 n8 tThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ : ~4 ^$ a5 ?7 W' i绝对舒适，绝对优惠！+ O9 T( }6 Z' S; A- t q6 Z; }
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。" C* {1 T0 i/ K' [/ ]; \% W
房屋舒适，环境好。3 Q U2 e. I) E7 S
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！$ _* A1 v. [+ P1 _( z
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！9 x- W- r% A" [, _' G) s
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。$ ~! j2 w* P' e c0 E
房屋舒适，环境好。 5 H( }9 s: ^7 D( o7 OThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 + {% S# L+ }% W2 A D( E) }6 R* u朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 1 N3 x% N5 k$ M" @2 X舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ * J% U+ _7 A x3 yThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. * S) B! Y4 f! R- Q2 U4 z! {3 H联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 $ h9 U: `4 T9 p( r# w& [) U9 S/ W# j朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 $ @5 e! m8 U* Y2 }舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ # t4 G7 c q; r0 i# w8 L. i) ^This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.( q* M2 |, e! _1 }8 J" @8 G
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