本帖最后由 爱美丽的小肥猫 于 2025-5-17 11:36 编辑 ) g g; Q# n6 O' q6 V8 T, k % E; _0 _; J" |; \ Z: w0 S( X9 WWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。; \! C4 h0 T! N- c$ q
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。2 S1 v7 |6 R/ ]& L' p
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！8 t2 i l! `7 U+ {7 P7 K
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. ' I/ k: w1 d1 M" _0 o联系电话 02106259995 Z5 D, N2 [' J: Y4 a
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 . q" T( |$ v \" K: H% Z8 `3 ~6 l房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。 E' j$ l( I. o* v8 {1 x' B7 EThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 7 z9 U' k6 K* P) @$ D房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 G8 I: P. a" \; y& {
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。) q; ~" n' c) P
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。1 J6 B8 m- O% H
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性：+ L* Y. f0 h4 e2 ]' u& m! D
) k7 U% I/ |& E/ z8 s* w+ ~4 W6 @原始错误分析 6 i& E; q( V8 O1 Y8 u/ K$ J6 D0 y; g6 ~ , {* O3 ], ~( f$ ?/ N+ U. B1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。 3 l$ j( ]' T" n+ F7 S# O ( a- ~7 t5 _% B2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。# h! U& P0 u3 a. s% ~
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3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。 8 f) U; c$ P4 o% B 7 B# \% m: p) ]1 l6 M7 f4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。 3 b7 O+ h' c0 S# { ) D9 r' X; w! q- l修改后的版本 : m6 M; w3 v8 e 5 G! {- I$ |7 O& X2 AGood afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you?/ }, j; o5 o e/ o: i
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版本说明 3 @. s/ M( y; j, X1 W3 I5 o% V * y1 [' `' @$ h6 J- u) D1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。 2 j/ s1 A2 f; K ; H8 ^8 D( F0 {- ^' d& \
2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 5 G$ }6 [" ^1 X# c- g房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。9 e: ?" ~# M7 v" W2 b% G2 K" b+ p
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 , a4 @- S6 G5 n# M, R) J房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。8 y4 A% G' e) ]& _
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 4 l7 Y9 G. Q+ M- `房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。; t8 ]5 i$ j3 r0 S; b" i
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 2 c' `3 i: U- R6 c2 ~房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 0 Z0 T; ~) P% u7 J$ V$ H6 @This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ * e, {: H1 h8 n1 F! a绝对舒适，绝对优惠！2 H0 j5 w6 K `, q) W' U! d, J
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。: c+ k" ^( Y, W9 P/ V
房屋舒适，环境好。5 b/ R& K1 v" K9 I! b4 u% L; |- H
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ 1 D( q k* x* | m; O$ z绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ $ H- P0 E+ i) x8 o' }Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 # G; a* I7 l$ e7 j房屋舒适，环境好。 3 @( I; X3 y# N" r' S- GThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！3 i. `2 W9 R3 U) ?; w, o7 H% J
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ g7 v; n1 j* I M+ w s
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 N+ Y* [ N& D8 O& I4 Y
房屋舒适，环境好。 ) f. |2 E7 J" [ s+ S! l8 kThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ; a0 t' b3 h) ^朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 * c' Y/ u7 J4 m: v5 @* w2 l舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ H) |3 s; e9 L# Z
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. ; ]$ ~; I0 f( X3 n联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。9 Z6 H0 S$ t% }$ N1 P, r
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。5 q; z# h& O4 R9 n
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ ' Y) Y+ X+ \" S, j. Z5 [6 }This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.! q. y$ C/ ~0 D0 g( r* Q# P& \
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