本帖最后由 爱美丽的小肥猫 于 2025-5-29 18:01 编辑 2 x- A% w0 ^4 E 1 ?+ G7 K, l9 D* G0 L2 [Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ; Z8 t1 ~" a- V4 f, H朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。" w6 @) s$ a5 s' ^$ H) ?6 A$ D
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ / R5 U; Q% u4 |' u1 ?This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. , f; v* w. k5 k* {联系电话 0210625999 9 T& W; z7 Q( @ U$ s/ o4 R6 b/ Z( y; V$ V& D; o
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 6 X! z# j. ]5 X; m/ V c房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。 b) j/ S' s1 L6 o, N: b7 w* N" U% v
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 % M+ M/ a7 n! W5 w e房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 4 m7 p- d. ^" P2 jThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 , n: b* K- L# v3 y K2 A房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 ; V, I% v1 b- j- bThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性： + n! F) T9 W* S g" m + ~! p I. n9 D" R
原始错误分析 " c6 @( m. f, @ / e; n/ H5 A+ V9 E6 e8 a1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。 ) o+ n% \% P {/ G# p4 W& k / q4 s A7 C3 U0 x" I( l
2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。( E9 A4 t! s0 x4 z/ [& S- ?
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3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。 9 x9 i) x! ]; F+ f% X6 E3 k9 ?# } . s' ^- \: [: J0 l/ W
4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。 . m! G' _6 T0 \5 X4 ^' p 3 X0 F7 W( ?. Z3 M# }) Z \- V
修改后的版本 5 R4 N+ i1 Q8 o6 V( X; }) R ( x3 z& {0 h% V, u
Good afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you? 5 x4 V9 b1 S! F" ^( k ] B7 c % g0 F/ c" L; I4 m! Q2 r2 }版本说明1 h: e0 q7 R/ `7 N6 r& v5 Z
8 h1 s5 Z0 h7 j' X5 I1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。6 M8 s$ i8 H0 w6 i$ P% E; m
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2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
, ~" H4 n# U6 O) N) H2 ?0 [Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 , z9 m8 b. y% v- u4 k% `房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 9 G5 g2 y6 s: @) U; gThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 5 p0 z% y. O! K3 L4 \房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 $ D) S: O. m) V3 q9 O( TThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。. Y% }1 d& E! d3 K. s; G5 R
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。) b4 E) N$ r! ~3 v4 e1 c: Y
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 7 \3 Z# z% K _6 h' B1 }) C房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 & e9 f$ Z; R# MThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ $ c" y8 }" y: u- z3 b/ g绝对舒适，绝对优惠！) Q2 ]& t' @" n+ m3 m H
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。9 d& W* h( v" j8 u1 _' j+ z
房屋舒适，环境好。6 e. O7 I+ ?& N' T- S E* I4 E) `
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ {* u8 F9 ]5 ?% b* C0 z绝对舒适，绝对优惠！% u7 b1 M: R: Z4 A. r& ^; X( d
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。, u8 p( I8 O t
房屋舒适，环境好。7 d2 r8 e3 X5 X# M
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ : B5 `- X; q" @6 f- F绝对舒适，绝对优惠！, f" s+ E' s1 P. z1 V, e
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 e9 w; B. i q1 F4 L1 E% N房屋舒适，环境好。7 U8 X. a& J, S. ~
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。, }+ l* [1 }1 ^0 c4 M
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。# U* l" I# m* z* }- v5 ?1 N
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ + l/ {. {% X- w: u( Q7 _This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 1 w- Y* {% _2 \ y" F ^! }联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 : V+ ]8 H- B" T9 N- p- q朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。5 }1 ?* s _, e# x1 h
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！9 g, O4 S* m. c8 C; n7 v
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. * C6 Z9 n! c. t联系电话 0210625999
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