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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 X! Y$ J2 B: C# ~
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ( b, {! i, E+ z7 E! N' u: X舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 5 ?6 C& ^+ n. ^* Q; x" _3 K$ U; ^This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.0 {6 H6 w3 H; z! h" z
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 L9 S5 r1 K0 B房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。 6 |. u- k! Y1 R- W0 b1 xThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 5 ?& U: B( k& u( G房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 : C" v* j. J% Q# ~& pThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。* s( p5 q% E& v1 S& O6 }1 d
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 & R3 V. ]* u2 y" n" Q, `This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性： 7 ~ m. U" H0 i' i 1 Y ?( Q( h( O% }0 h# A$ H原始错误分析* \ ]9 w2 { V+ E" t
" }- q4 P4 `1 |& M1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。 2 r/ r4 J( ]3 B' {% B$ L# v# m : }2 a* g, C3 s3 M; ~! @) l8 ~
2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。 3 W* x/ [1 V q% H, b( Q * G) | T3 n% n& n$ Z8 p' H' Y3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。 , O! G) a8 x8 A: {+ m# \* q ( C. \+ |1 o+ F" ?+ @8 e
4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。( a) U; I% s1 }3 L( h! s |
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修改后的版本 0 r& a7 @( ? o- g( f8 O 4 h& z1 ^5 w) b0 b/ b3 DGood afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you?" ~2 N" a, ]- q5 C1 c
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版本说明2 Z, i1 i/ H; t4 G0 T' [: X/ ^
' J3 @$ j p$ \# E2 F y; s1 r- P& e1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。. b7 X# L( ^" C8 l
3 t5 M% r: T/ }. Q7 z2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
# r; E. y& a3 x/ y# NWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。/ _2 K' {; u' K& j
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。4 p1 W( c9 n0 \& d$ G2 ~. J! A
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。8 g$ Y7 Q r; D9 P4 z1 n
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。7 N q! ` B) G N0 g& k1 _% h
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 5 H. k0 h% b3 f1 j房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 + \3 ]: y8 C; k0 [& p! oThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。& x/ [" O6 F5 j& W7 H
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。+ I7 T9 ~- _* t6 }
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ 0 A5 X" k, a0 X. `; p6 e绝对舒适，绝对优惠！( ?1 @! n+ W5 K+ E/ W+ L" q, ^3 _: d
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。! f. ]& S. x+ g5 E+ [
房屋舒适，环境好。 / |) V# ~( C7 l7 E5 oThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！+ {" }5 }- E2 V, z
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！8 P% u% R; U' g+ h# z
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 6 T0 U: z8 a _% @- P8 L4 ^# Q8 O房屋舒适，环境好。0 q$ x& M8 j* x1 ? k
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！; u9 E6 J6 T, _) ?2 d
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！" H2 A, b# Z/ E2 a# \/ ^) f8 b
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 9 Z0 y- g7 Z+ @" s: i. x# |房屋舒适，环境好。 - Q& f# m. `' P* @2 fThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。; L5 K4 n$ e- Y( ]
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。5 e& a2 f8 F- I) P4 c
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ ( i6 S% [# w1 c9 e! tThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. s7 c. a; H0 D联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。5 {) t- f. ^# {' Q5 l
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ) ^9 Q0 O6 @& x, j8 r; Y9 M& Q舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！, o$ Y! z( L5 C0 w) ]
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids." W! ?; n6 I8 w) w* d
联系电话 0210625999
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